The writing craft uses familiar experiences to help readers enter the moment. I enjoy seasoning my writing with puns and one-liners.
Writer One “I’d like to introduce you to my great friend. She helps evoke instant visualization by my readers”.
Writer Two, “It’s good to renew your acquaintance; we’ve met afore”.
As you read, you’ll encounter comparisons indicating the writer gets the concept but runs short on finesse. What do you think of this example?
The stench from his unwashed crevices attracted the senses like the steam from a fresh pie planted by a Siberian cow on a winter day.
I had fun devising an alternative.
Bereft of soap and water, his aura inspired Mary Kay’s cologne, eau my God.
Or, maybe:
He stunk.